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PostSubject: HidanTema fics   Tue Jan 22, 2008 1:45 pm

Here they are... the beginnings of some drabbles I've written up. They're both very imcomplete, but I still want feedback on the teensy amount I have done. Oh, and tell me if I really should write more, please!

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# 1
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That one is going for the prize of first lemon I've ever written...

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# 2
Wind whistled and snow whipped though the air, violently twisting and turning in an endless frantic dance. Trees bend and shuddered, their branches straining against the blizzard.

Two figures trekked through the whipping winds, walking close together. Teal eyes squeezed shut, lavender eyes squinting ahead. An Akatsuki cloak billowed behind them, a red scarf whipped with the wind. A tall scythe with three chilling curved blades and a large closed fan were strapped to their backs, each quivering against their owner’s back as the wind pressed on them.

The figures walked forward through the blizzard, seeming to be in an endless competition to see who would give in first. Any exposed skin felt burned under the freezing ice droplets and deadly wind. They both ignored the aching pain ripping through their tired limbs and dancing across their skin, determined to win the unspoken argument.

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And that's all! I'm typing more as I speak. I'm full of ideas and inspiration. Squee 3 Please give me feedback. I hope you enjoyed them!


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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Tue Jan 22, 2008 5:13 pm

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Jk, no, I like them. Heh, good job on your *first* lemon. For that one, I would suggest using less pronouns, though. I know that's the point, leaving out the names, but you could pull a "the". Like, "the S-Rank criminal" or "the blond bitch".

But, yeah. Keep going. Keep rumbling on. Maybe you should spoiler-tag the first one, you know. WW's on the board, and soon others will be. XD

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Tue Jan 22, 2008 6:03 pm

Weeeeell thank yew, anikoku! I shall work on the pronoun thing. I like your idea. :D

Tis been spoiler tagged! XD

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Thu Jan 24, 2008 1:29 pm

XD These are AWSOME Fai_re !!!!! Keep writing, definetly!!!
AND FINISH!!! AND POST!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
As always, these are really good! Keep working on them!!! Sweetheart

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Thu Jan 24, 2008 5:07 pm

Hurrr... thanks. Embarassed

Yah... You like it when I finish things, don't you? I'll post em. Definitely.

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Thu Jan 24, 2008 5:39 pm

Welcome! It's true though!

And yeah, I like it when you post things! Becuase otherwise I never get to read them!
If you don't post these, Hidan-san will get you!! Hidan

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Thu Jan 24, 2008 5:47 pm

:D

hur... I know.

Oh noes! Hidan!! Nuuuuuu! *cries*

I SHALL POST! SU!

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Thu Jan 24, 2008 6:08 pm

lol.
CHASE HIDAN!!! CHASE!!!! Hidan Hidan Hidan Hidan Hidan Hidan Hidan Hidan Hidan Hidan

YES! Post!!!

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Thu Jan 24, 2008 6:10 pm

lol!

Yes, sempai, put those pictures up there. Or else we can't help you with the editing. Razz
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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Fri Jan 25, 2008 2:17 pm

*crying from all the pressure*

C-can't t-thinkkk.... properllyy....

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Fri Jan 25, 2008 2:22 pm

NO!!!!!! CALM!!! WRITE!!!!!!!!! sweatdrop

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Fri Jan 25, 2008 2:56 pm

Yes... calm... write.

*quietly types*

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Fri Jan 25, 2008 2:59 pm

YES!!! Sparkly Fangirl!

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Fri Jan 25, 2008 3:04 pm

*typing*

hn.. I need advice. Should I write a lemon version?

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Fri Jan 25, 2008 3:05 pm

Fuck yes. Write it. Write it now.
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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Fri Jan 25, 2008 3:23 pm

*blink* Er... alright then. I write it when I get back from Barnes and Noble...

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Fri Jan 25, 2008 3:31 pm

hell yeah! I agree with anikoku!!! Drool

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Fri Jan 25, 2008 5:36 pm

Well.... I got some. The lemon hasn't started... really... but... hur. There's a lot of stuff that I'm still adding, like emotions and stuff, and more descriptive crap... Also, ignore the big (CENSORED) marks. I didn't have enough confidence and I felt too embarassed/bad to fill in the blanks... And I felt like I was betraying Hidan. TT_TT Plus, it's quite obvious to figure out what word goes in each (CENSORED) thinger-dinger, so be creative. Use whatever... Term you want. *chuckles nervously* It hasn't been proofread.... so yeah.

Here it is... *skitters off, sweating like nuts*
RATED T, FOSHIZZLE!
MEANING LIME!

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Sat Jan 26, 2008 5:59 pm

Awesome!! XD You write so well!!!! Techinically, it's a lime, but whatever! It's sooooo good!

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PostSubject: lime   Sat Jan 26, 2008 6:12 pm

lovee the censred.... lolz Razz it was lime..... u know that tho... it was good tho, it made me envy them (not the lime part the making out...) I WANT A FUCK BUDDY! but not to fuck them just to buddy their udder... Razz ooooh *nibble* ooohh that feels nice.. ooohhh sry humans Sparkly Fangirl! it was well written, i m going to go introduce myself in the introduction section XD
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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Sun Jan 27, 2008 11:55 am

Yeah, it was lime... I should've mentioned that. Whatever.

I'm glad you liked it, duckyloveexo!

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PostSubject: Re: HidanTema fics   Tue Jan 29, 2008 2:25 pm

XD

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